Cool. Catch ya on the flip side.

Hey, thought I'd review. Well, there are some grammatical and technicals errors here and there. The most obvious one being the confusion between 'there' and 'their'. It was a decent first attempt. All the characters didn't seem too off (as in OOC), and I really liked that the killing was set in a deserted alley of some sorts. It's kinda funny when you think of it, cos most of the 'murders' seem to often happen in dark, deserted alleys in the show, don't they?

Anyway, the plot is pretty flimsy to say the least. I found it very clever though that you just wrote the dialogues down and didn't do any descriptive writing (not much anyway). It's the area where most people fumble. By not doing any descriptive/narrative writing, you've avoided pretty much making the characters go 'out-of-character'. Well, in all honesty, the story wasn't that bad, but it wasn't really that good either (though it was far from the worst I've read). Overall, I'll say it's mediocre. But hey! That's not too shabby for a first try. You should read some of loveconquers' stories. They're stellar!