hello!im only 10

-Then get the ** off the site, honey. Thirteen in the minimum age to be here.

-The h in hello must be capital. You need a space between the exclamation point and I'm, which you also spelt wrong. It's I'm, not im. You really should write out numbers.

and i have a greatimagination

-Which you've so /clearly/ displayed in this fic. -Eyeroll.-

-Capital I, space between great and imagination.

but i just HATE writing/typing,okay?!?

-No, not "okay." There is no excuse. I'm not even bothering to correct your grammar anymore.

its my first time typing/writing on the computer,BY MY

-Who gives a flying **? I don't. If you suck at typing, then learn it before you post anything.


OWN!i will complain to the webmaster AND creator of okay?!@$!^$*%

-By my own? It's by myself, honey. It's called grammar.

-Go on, report me. I could report you for breaking the ToS by A) Having horrible grammar. (Which, in the ToS, it states that you will check your grammar.) and B) Not being old enough to be here. Me? I've done nothing reportable.

-So, report me. Have fun.

~Qzil

Great non-existent God. Please, for the love of the English language, delete this, chuck your computer out the window, and stick your hands down the garbage disposal.

This is a pitiful attempt at romance, and, to be quite honest, your grammar looks like you did stick your hands down a garbage disposal before writing this. That, or you’re really, really drunk.

Learn romance, fix your plotholes, and learn grammar. Then, maybe, this’ll be /decent./

...o.O random...
i've always wondered who his father is. i've come to the discision that he doesn't have one.

that was short; but better. good job
XD wow i sounded so dull
manaphy is so YAY!!
UPDATE SOON! BUT IF U CAN MAKE IT LONGER, YEAH!

mwuahaha
u should space things out cause 1 big paragraph is confuzing
ex.
''Honchkrow,stand by for battle!''Paul cried as his tossed his pokeball.''use haze!''he command.
to
''Honchkrow,stand by for battle!''Paul cried as his tossed his pokeball.
''use haze!''he command.
other than that...
update soon!!

ok...so they all just "admitted" on their own? your not even gonna torture them? Your just going to "let" them "like" each other? okay! Manaphy is evil...mahaahaha
update soon!
(and really you don't have to rush it I can wait, I don't even update my stories that fast...mind the writers block...)

nice
but i had to pce it all together
you don't have to go so fast though...
the pokeshipping rocked!!

i see
i like it but just to say its a bit rushed
but thats okay
you might want to put more detail
but overall that was awesome
update soon~!