 freegirl 2008-04-11 . chapter 2Hi. Um, just FYI, this review is meant to cover both chapters you've written so far. So, I like what you have so far, although you may wanna ease up on Pyro's accent a bit. It seems pretty thick, and in the actual show I remember it as being milder. Um... I like how you put Angel with the X-Men, with your explanation at the beginning, 'cause he's one of my all-time favorite characters. I also noticed with some satisfaction that Psylocke and Angel will be spending a lot of time together... Heehee. :) An enormous plus on your story is the absence of foul language! One thing that really ticks me off is when people swear in their writing. I mean, it doesn't add anything, and some people (like me) will even stop reading an otherwise decent story purely because of bad language. High five for cleanliness! Anyway, I'm excited to see the plot unravel. So, keep up the good work and please update soon! |