hehe, the first lustxscar fic that i actually enjoyed reading :)

nice job =] keep it up ^_^

I really like the way you write. ^_^ Someone mentioned the parts in parentheses, but I think they fit with the style of the rest of the fic.

If this is your first fic, I'm very interested to see any more you do.

I thought it was a lovely first-timer...actually I thought it was just plain lovely no matter which way you look at it because it was better than most one shots I've read. It just...it made you sad. That's all.

I just saw "His Name is Unknown," so I figured out the characters pretty quick. Very nice, by the way. Very well written. Nice job. :)

very good.

The ambiguity was astoudning... but I suppose that stems from my own lack of understanding. Heh.

A thousand thanks to you for writing a Scar/Lust fic. (though I'm sure you've heard that before) The couple is overlooked and prolly under-rated, but... Well you took it and offered a grounds for more stories to come.

If you haven't guessed by now, I LOVED it (a favorite!) and I feel I must offer generous praise. (However, I lack the ability) It was Awesome. You're an excellent writer.

Um...I'm trying to refrain from mercilessly fangirling you, because this is the first Scar/Lust fic I've ever found. And it's good. And I love it to death. You have a beautiful handle on the characters, and this piece is a joy to read.

If there is one thing I can point out critically, it's the paranthetical phrases. They're a little distracting, but that's mostly a formatting issue. Integrating them as dependent clauses might work better.

I really hope to see more stuff from you. This famdom needs more good fanfic.

was very good

very nice story. I would critique if I could, but I can't, so I won't. It was very good, though. I especially liked how Lust wanted to understand belief.

Thank you.

I love it!

Not only because Scar and Lust is my favorite FMA pairing, and is hard to find. But also because it's strangely written, sometimes difficult to understand, but it's not bad, it creates a kind of resonance with Lust's thoughts, as she can't understand herself very well.

Warning - Spoilers! I'm sure anyone reading this fic would already know but just in case - I will be talking about events of episode 42!

I was shocked to read that this was your first fanfic. I am a huge fan of Scar, and although I've been wanting to write about him I haven't yet conceived of a good plot. But you did a wonderful job of writing this. Your writing style is different, unique. Your descriptions were good without being ridiculously long. It seems like a reinactment of their final scene together in the show, with him just dying in that building instead of outside like he does in the show.
However, I wasn't sure how much of that episode's events were tied to the fanfic.
I wasn't entirely sure if everything that happened in the show up to the point where he was shot was included with this fic or if he was dying of something else. Maybe a little bit of backstory of the most recent events before the fic's beginning would have helped? If that makes any sense. Like, perhaps a sentence or two of Lust recollecting the moment of Scar throwing himself infront of her to stop the bullets. Or maybe you did and I didn't notice.
But that was the only problem. Otherwise, I loved it. I'd love to see more Scar fics from you! I'm a huge fan and this is one of the only stories I've read where I felt the characters were really in character and the writing was well done! Keep up the great work! If this is your first story, then you're bound to become a great writer!

Very well written. Sad yet happy. I think. Man I am so not very poetic and stuff like that. oh well. ^_^ Cool fic.

Two words..."beautiful" and "sad"...you are a good writer ^^

Brilliant, very much so. You wrote this scene very well. Kudos!