i am impressed, greatly. Your grammer is near perfect, your vocabulary is widely varied, overall i enjoyed reading your fics. anyway, WHY DID YOU ABANDON THIS FAN FIC?! i think it can actually be developed into a rather interesting story. hmm, i think there is suspense there, and a smooth switching from perspective to perspective. All hail Hao-sama!

Since your english is impeccable, pls help me rate my first fan fic. Warning: it's romance, yaoi, Yoh/Hao. flames are accepteted, though mst be accompanied by constructive comments. thanks

PLEASE WRITE MORE SOON IT WAS GOD!

You are wonderful! I mean that. I thought I'd never find even a decent writer in the Shaman King fandom, and then I found someone as talented as you. ^_^ The rhythmic flow of your narrative, the clear, imaginative descriptions, the fantastic characterization - all outstanding. In fact, you managed to hit upon the very story concept I've been musing over to myself, and I love seeing how you're developing it.

As to pairings, well, I prefer not to know. Really, what fun is that? And in any case, I feel a lot of the problem with fanfics lately is they focus so much on pairings that they lose a significant amount of plot because of it.

I sincerely love this story so far, and it would be a great tragedy not to see it continued! Please do! ^^

Make the pairing HaoxYoh please!

I just realized that asked what sort of pairings you should have. I vote for HaoxYoh! There aren't enough fics like that out there!

Oh! What happens next? Will there be any pairings? Great job! Please update soon!

awsome! please continue!

Hello again - I had to check out your bio, I enjoyed the other story I reviewed so much. As for your bio...it was one of the nicest I've read in a long time - Ren/Yoh I adore and one sided Tamao/Yoh, well, that often makes me cry if the fic is well written. ^^;; I have no idea why I'm commenting on it, but I just wanted to say your's was lovely.

Right, story. >< As for pairings - am I assuming you want to centre on Hao or Yoh? Well, Hao...as you said in your bio, can we really see Hao in love? XD However, the way you've been writing him which seems so mystical, almost wistful, I can imagine it. In case you haven't noticed, but a smart one like you will have, I have a soft spot for pink haired girls and that's all I'll say. Toodles.

Way to leave a cliffhanger; please write more soon?

this is really cool!! please continue

i like it; it's not to far from the Shaman King story itself it seems very much like a cotinuation of the series. can't wait for the next one.

Ok, I love your fic cause it is Hao-centric, and I think your idea is great ...ut It is a little bit confusing... Is that, er... English is not my mother language... Got it? Sorry for my stupidity and silliness ( does these 2 words exist??)

That rocked! I LOVE it! You just use a tad too many words that may pass over other people's heads.

Otherwise, good. Hurry up and update!

wow.. I really like the way you wrote it so far; it sounds like you're off to a great start! :)

keep going & update soon!

YOU ARE RIGHT! I´M SICK AND TIRED OF ROMANCE FICS!

Keep going I like your idea but there is one mistake Isaw in your fic:

Hao is MINE