Andromeda77 2004-10-26 . chapter 1Ooh - I like this one. I like how we see Draco's fear as he's writing the letter. How you keep flashing to what's going on outside the room...and there he is within - in the candlelight - writing his father the letter.
I love how Draco says that he's content with who he really is. This is the Draco that I imagine. That we see him come to terms with the person he wants to be...the person he really is - not the person his father is making him.
The single flame from the candle flickered against his breath, causing the firelight to dance along his plain white walls.
I liked the imagery on this line. I'm a sucker for "flickering candles." (I have one of those in my story, too! *grin*)
Then suddenly the floors in the hallway creaked, and instantly he withdrew his hand.
The suspense in this line is good!
I really love your Draco. You do a great job with him.
And just a question on this last line:
And then he turned, with eyes trained to look ahead, and left.
Does this mean he's living a lie? Not 100% sure if I'm reading that right, but if I am I think that's totally cool.
Lovely job...I like the plot behind this ficlet a lot. ;) |
Sadako Kurosawa 2004-07-02 . chapter 1Incredible fanfiction! ^_^ I liked it a lot... Poor Draco, always feeling like his father's not pleased with him. :( |
Ms. Lit 2004-03-20 . chapter 1 Poor Draco. He must be young here huh? Very poignant. |
Soot Box 2004-03-12 . chapter 1Are you going to continue because you should. |
Elowen 2003-12-08 . chapter 1Wow, an amzing piece of work.
:( My poor Draco :( |
SupportSeverusSnape 2003-11-25 . chapter 1No words can describe this perfect fic. I love the Linkin Park song. This is written perfectly. I feel so sorry for Draco. |
burgosdamasco 2003-11-25 . chapter 1Interesting to see what is going on in dear Draco's head...I just wanna hug him...poor boy! |
Zecortazanne 2003-11-25 . chapter 1Wow! really great writing! and Love the song...its involved in my stories as well. You sre a very talented writer and I hope to see more from ya. Keep going! |
Andrea 2003-11-24 . chapter 1 Beautiful. |
Maureen 2003-11-24 . chapter 1 That was soo deep *_* I love it ^^ I think it fits in well with the song. I love that song as well, and almost all the songs on the Meteora CD *huggles her cd* |
sky-blu-tears 2003-11-24 . chapter 1that was REALLY good |